Monday, October 26, 2009

Teaser Tuesday

Okay, this is my last Teaser Tuesday for a while. School is kicking my butt, and I'm gearing up for NaNoWriMo. I don't know, maybe I'll post random snippets here and there, but maybe not.

Anyway! Here is my revamped first page of EG, the WIP. Oooo, acronyms!

PS, not too happy with my first line, still tweaking it around.

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I couldn't believe I'd been that stupid. I glanced over my shoulder to see if the curly haired, semi-attractive Greek-boy still followed. Finding him nowhere in sight, I breathed a sigh of relief. I knew I shouldn't have wandered away from the group, but the mystery of Ancient Greece beckoned me. For the last hour I'd found myself wandering the new Acropolis museum, mesmerized by the ancient metopes and everything Parthenon. I was such a Greek geek.

Halfway into my obsession, I noticed the boy. And kept noticing him until I had a vision of my face on the back of a milk carton. Last year's school picture was so not flattering. I did my best to lose him, clinging to my determination not to be a statistic in the trade of human trafficking. Don’t get me wrong, having any kind of boy, let alone a Greek one, follow me around added bonus points to the constantly dipping Richter scale of my self-confidence. But it started to get more than creepy when I kept seeing him around each corner. To tip the creep-factor, he tried to introduce himself. Henry.

Home free, I found the trailing line of my class meandering downstairs to the Archaic Gallery. A quick glance at my cell phone’s time ensured me that Mr. Beckett would be five kinds of pissed. The aroma of freshly brewed coffee in the little café to my right smelled better than anything I’d ever ordered at Starbucks. Before I could turn my head from the coffee shop, my step faltered. I barely controlled the gasp that escaped. Henry’s reflection looked at me in the glass doors of the café as he followed close behind.

12 comments:

  1. Ooooooooh.

    And YAY! You're doing NANO!!!!

    WHOHOO!!

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  2. I'm really enjoying this story.

    I can't wait to see where it goes!

    Yay, for another NaNo fool!!! :D

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  3. Thanks guys, glad it's reading well. Yay for Nano!

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  4. I love the voice of this story! I'd totally keep a-reading. Yay for teasers!

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  5. Ooh, loving the teasers I've read from this story, in no small part because it's set in Greece. And the voice is awesome!

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  6. AWESOME CC!!!!!!! Can't wait to see what you've done with the rest!

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  7. The voice is very high school-ish and modern. It reads great and the tone is perfect for the situation!

    love the last part, where she thinks she's home-free then spots "Henry" again, lol.

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  8. Thanks everyone! And Tracy, YOU, my friend, are awesome, and thanks for all your inspiration and ideas in this!

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  9. Very cute. Loving the sarcastic tone she thinks in. Wonder is Henry is a psycho stalker or what???

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  10. Great voice here, Christa! I'm dying to know what Henry wants. Is this paranormal?

    I *loved* my trip to Greece. Sigh...

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  11. It is paranormal. I'll give a hint. He's someone to do in Greek mythology ;) So glad the voice is working!

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  12. This is a great opening. You have a really good handle on the teen voice. Love it. Good look with Nano.

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